Talk:KCU/03/Lady Knights

Instructor Feedback on First Draft

As a first draft, this contribution falls short. Even though you have a lot of information & sources (good job on that!), the work has not been organized & revised into a clear, readable form. If this were submitted for the final draft, it would pass with around a C grade. On the other hand, you have done some very good work gathering dialog partners & in taking notes on those resources.

Things to work on:

1. Organize your information by writing your own explanatory & summarizing paragraphs & incorporating your dialog partners into your own writing

2. Expand your treatment of all biblical passages that shed light on the issue of the Trinity--organize & streamline the discussion at the same time

3. Make clearer while interacting with your dialog partners how you would evaluate their views & arguments. For instance, Pack gives a lot of disputable claims & has a view that is not very compatible with most of the rest of what you write & what you found in other dialog partners. You will need to bring in a counter-weight to Pack if you believe that his claims are misleading.

4. Improve the formatting--see the Editing help link at the bottom of the editing page for instructions