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== Instructor's Feedback on First Draft == | == Instructor's Feedback on First Draft == | ||
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You have a nice start. So, keep up the good work! | You have a nice start. So, keep up the good work! | ||
Some additional web resources you can look at: | |||
http://www.sing365.com/music/Lyric.nsf/Enough-lyrics-Chris-Tomlin/96C9D29021D30A7148256DF200238A8E | |||
http://www.fullbooks.com/A-Short-History-of-Monks-and-Monasteries1.html | |||
http://www.goarch.org/en/ourfaith/articles/article7103.asp | |||
http://www.suite101.com/lesson.cfm/18869/2691/7 | |||
http://www.christianitytoday.com/ct/2005/september/16.38.html | |||
http://www.incommunion.org/articles/issue-30/monasticism-and-the-way-of-radical-peace | |||
http://www.newadvent.org/cathen/10464a.htm | |||
http://www.newadvent.org/cathen/10464a.htm | |||
http://www.intelligentchristian.org/Care%20Files.htm | |||
Revision as of 16:24, 27 September 2007
Instructor's Feedback on First Draft
This is a nicely written first draft. The sentences & paragraphs are well-formed & the article reads like it fits together as a whole. So, good job on that!
If this were the final draft, the grade would be something like a C. The main reason is that you need to add more dialog partners from extra research & you also need to expand your biblical coverage more (though less than with dialog partners).
Things to improve:
1. Incorporate more dialog partners from extra research into your discussion in a smooth way
2. Look at other biblical evidence. Three lines that you can examine more are: (1) Jesus' practice of gathering & traveling with his disciples; (2) Paul's practice of having traveling companions & his expressions of longing & affection for them when they're absent; & (3) the emphases on Christian as a body, a family, etc.
You have a nice start. So, keep up the good work!
Some additional web resources you can look at:
http://www.sing365.com/music/Lyric.nsf/Enough-lyrics-Chris-Tomlin/96C9D29021D30A7148256DF200238A8E http://www.fullbooks.com/A-Short-History-of-Monks-and-Monasteries1.html http://www.goarch.org/en/ourfaith/articles/article7103.asp http://www.suite101.com/lesson.cfm/18869/2691/7 http://www.christianitytoday.com/ct/2005/september/16.38.html http://www.incommunion.org/articles/issue-30/monasticism-and-the-way-of-radical-peace http://www.newadvent.org/cathen/10464a.htm http://www.newadvent.org/cathen/10464a.htm http://www.intelligentchristian.org/Care%20Files.htm